My
snog this Sunday comes from an unfinished story entitled
Calculated Risk. Like many of my books, I started writing this to challenge myself; I
wanted to create an erotic romance in which the characters were the
opposite of exotic. My heroine Laura is an insurance agent. My hero
is a shy, awkward music teacher.
More
than seven years ago, I wrote three chapters of this book. Then my
motivation sputtered and died. Now I’m wondering whether I should
revive the tale and try to finish it.
What
do you think? Read the kiss excerpt below, then give me your opinion.
Would you want more from these characters?
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energize you, I’ll give away a $5 bookstore gift certificate to one
randomly selected commenter!
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A
knock on the door frame made me jump. "Laura, are you in there?"
a hearty baritone voice called.
"Just
a minute, Sam. I'm with a client." Laura scooped up my briefcase
and dropped it into my lap, covering my still-open fly. She checked
that all her buttons were fastened, and smoothed her hair. "Okay,
you can come in."
The
voice belonged to a tall, athletic-looking guy of about thirty,
neatly dressed in a suit that even I could tell was expensive. "Hey,
Laura, Beecham won't be happy if he finds out you're using his
office."
"I'm
sure that he wouldn't mind. It's so hot in the outer office today.
He'd want me to make sure that our customers are comfortable."
Sam
looked me over curiously. I wondered if the office smelled of sex.
"This
is Mr. Rossini. His mother has a policy with us, and he came in to
ask some questions about it." I noted her half-truth with some
interest.
"Mr.
Rossini, I'd like to introduce Sam Cooper, our top salesman."
The
handshake was a bit awkward since I didn't dare stand up.
"Rossini...
From Longmeadow, right?"
"Right.
I'm impressed, Mr. Cooper. Do you remember every customer?"
"Pretty
much. It's part of my system, the reason I'm the best in the
business." Cooper laid a casual hand on Laura's shoulder. "Isn't
that true, Laura?"
She
smiled sweetly up at his chiselled features. I decided that I didn't
like him. "There's no one who's better than you, Sam. At
selling, at least."
Then
she was all business again. "Did you need something, Sam?"
"No,
I'm fine. Just got off the road and thought I'd check in, find out
what you're up to."
"Just
the usual. Doing my best for the company."
Cooper
gave me a knowing smile. All the double-entendres were making me very
nervous.
"Well,
keep up the good work. See you at the barbecue on Saturday. Nice to
meet you, Mr. Rossini."
"Shut
the door behind you, will you please?" Laura called after him.
I
didn't breathe again until I heard the latch click. "Do you
think he knows?"
"I
doubt it. He doesn't have the requisite imagination. It's too bad he
didn't come in a few minutes earlier. He might have found the scene
quite instructive." Laura read the shock and dismay on my face.
She grinned like a mischievous child.
"Angelo,
I'm only kidding." I wasn't completely sure that was true.
"Look, you shouldn't worry so much. I was only having some fun."
She stroked my thigh in a proprietary gesture. "It was fun,
wasn't it?"
I
zipped my pants, hiding my semi-stiff cock, and sat up straight. I
struggled to reclaim some dignity. "That's not exactly the word
that I would use."
"What
word would you prefer? 'Thrilling'? 'Overwhelming'? 'Life-changing'?"
"I
was thinking more of 'nasty' and 'obscene'."
"Oh,
don't be such a prude! And don't pretend that you didn't like it. You
can put on the moral purity act with someone else, but you don't fool
me. I know you, Angelo. I know how to touch you, inside and out."
She
slipped to her knees in front of me, took my face in her hands, and
kissed me.
It
was the last thing I expected.
The
kiss was gentle, full of sweetness. I sensed her need, a
vulnerability that was completely at odds with the Laura I had seen
so far. Her lips melded with mine; they parted shyly. I couldn't
resist the urge. I allowed my tongue to wander into her mouth, to
explore her textures and tastes: minty toothpaste, black coffee, and
a faint bitter tang that I knew was my own cum.
I
gathered her in my arms and pulled her into my lap without breaking
the kiss. Sudden passion erased her passivity. She seized me and
crushed my body against hers. Our tongues tangled together. Now she
was bold, vulnerability replaced by a different type of neediness.
She gulped me down like water in the desert. I could hardly breathe,
but I didn't care. My hands traveled over her luscious body, molding
the curve of her hips, tracing the line of her spine through the thin
crepe of her blouse, up along her ribs to where her soft breast was
flattened against my chest. She shivered when I touched her there,
and deepened her kiss.
I
imagined lying naked with her, our limbs entwined. I was dying to
feel her bare skin. I grabbed her blouse in the back and pulled it
up, out of her waistband, then fumbled with the clasp of her
brassiere.
She
broke away from me. "No, not here, not now."
"I
thought you got a thrill from the risk of exposure." Defiantly,
I unfastened the second hook. I pressed my bare palms against the
silky skin of her back, and tried to bring her mouth back to mine.
She
managed somehow to extricate herself from my grasp. "Sometimes
that's what I like. Sometimes it's not. Right now, I'm thinking that
our first fuck should be more relaxed and comfortable than we could
be in here."
I
winced as the raw word tumbled from her sweet lips. She noticed.
"Oh,
my poor Angelo! I'll cure you of the affliction of your innocence."
Deftly, she reached behind her and refastened her bra, then tucked in
her blouse. She kissed me lightly, pulling back before I could grab
her again. "Don't be concerned, hon. You won't miss it."
So,
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14 comments:
Sounds like it would be a good short read. For when you just need something to take you away from the daily grind.
Michelle B. OOPS! forgot my email purrpurrkoshkamb@aol.com
3 characters leading into a three some outside of the office. Or Sam knows the smell of sex in the office and a blackmail scene is developed. Lots of ways to write this story out.Go for it...short and sweet. mhustvet@hotmail.com
finish it; would be interesting
bn100candg at hotmail dot com
I like the opening. Intriguing as the rest.
debby236 at gmail dot com
With the humor shown in this scene, it should be a funny read as Laura gets Angelo to open up and lose his prudishness. I'd read it
Hmmm . . . Shy and awkward? Potential! Hidden kinky exhibitionist side even. Yep! I think I need more. Doesn't everyone! MORE! MORE! Please More! Or is that Harder? Oh yeah! Both!:D Bottom line, I like the snog and I think you need to write this! pansyparsons at hotmail dot com
Sounds pretty hot, would definitely read more!
melanie_brac@yahoo.com
I don't generally appreciate stories told from the male POV, but I could see myself getting into this one.
I liked what you have shown us so far... definitely think you should continue w/it! greenshamrock ATcoxDOTnet :)
Looks like it would be fun to see them shed their inhibitions!
Trix, vitajex(at)Aol(Dot)com
I would like to read more thank you.
marypres(AT)gmail(DOT)com
Laura is one dirty broad. I like her. It's an interesting start. It could go so many ways. jepeb (at) verizon DOT net
I'm not sure how I feel about Laura but I always did like a shy character and Angelo seems like he might need soe help and Laura is just the person to help him.
humhumbum AT yahoo DOT com
Thanks, everyone, for your encouraging comments. I'm deep in my werewolf/vampire novel at the moment, but I may pick this up after that's done.
Congratulations to Colleen, who was picked by Random.org as my winner!
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