http://caszarekwriter.blogspot.com/2014/10/friday-feature-lisabet-sarais-confused.html
Since the post I sent her was too long - I do have a problem with wordiness - she decided to omit my excerpt from The Ingredients of Bliss. So I'm posting it here, just for fun, and because it highlights my main point about my character's confusion.
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Excerpt (R-rated)
“Damn
you both!
I’m
not some
piece of
meat to
be carved
up between
you!” All
at once
I wanted
to get
out of
this too
crowded bed.
I wanted
to throw
on my
clothes and
storm out
of the
room in
righteous
indignation. To
do so,
though, I
would have
to clamber
over Etienne’s
magnificent body.
It would
be difficult
to avoid
touching his
resurgent
erection.
“Calm
down, Emily.”
Harry’s
hand clamped
around my
wrist and
I knew
I wasn’t
going anywhere.
“We did
confer about
tonight, I
admit. We
agreed that
sharing you
was the
best approach
to a
situation that
was bound
to become
awkward very
soon.”
“Awkward?
Things were
going very
smoothly. You
dominated me.
I dominated
Etienne. Everyone
was happy.”
“You
weren’t
happy, love.
Admit it.
You felt
guilty and
confused. When
you were
with Etienne,
you felt
as though
you were
betraying me.
Meanwhile
Etienne’s
devotion had
you worried
about his
reaction when
he learned
you belonged
to me.”
He
was right,
of course.
I remembered
my tête
à
tête
with Etienne
at the
café that
afternoon. I’d
been terribly
concerned about
his reaction
to the
news about
Harry. Meanwhile
when Harry
had made
me recount
my exploits
with Etienne,
I’d
always tried
to conceal
my excitement,
to play
down the
thrill I
got acting
the role
of his
mistress.
“You’ve
got nothing
to hide
now.” With
his lanky
frame, mussed
hair and
crooked grin,
Harry almost
looked like
a teenager.
A very
horny teen,
considering the
substantial
erection bobbing
hopefully at
his groin.
He flipped
back onto
his side
and fixed
me with
a slightly
fuzzy gaze.
He was
irresistibly cute
without his
glasses.
“Everything’s
out in
the open.”
“But
it’s
all
so—complicated!”
As usual,
my objections
began to
melt in
the warmth
of his
smile.
He
danced his
fingers up
my outstretched
thigh and
my pussy
clenched in
anticipation.
“On
the contrary,
I think
this considerably
simplifies the
situation—Ms
Wong.”
Etienne’s
voice was
deferential, but
I read
a mirror
of Harry’s
mischief in
his expression.
“I serve
you. You
serve Harry.
Each of
us gets
what he
or she
wants.”
“There’s
no more
need for
secrets, love.
Or for
surreptitiously
administered
enhancements to
the libido,
either…”
Harry slipped
a fingertip
between my
moist lips
and grazed
a fingernail
across my
clit.
My annoyance paled next to the flare of
pleasure kindled by his touch. Before I could clamp down to hold his
hand in my crotch, however, he’d snatched it away.
“Oh
no!” I
groaned, fighting
arousal and
disappointment.
“You told
him…?”
“I
had my
suspicions in
any case.
It doesn’t
matter. Your
methods might
have been
dubious, but
I’m
grateful for
the results.”
Etienne glanced
down at
the livid
marks from
my beating,
a set
of parallel
strips leading
up his
lean thighs
toward his
rearing cock.
“I might
never have
had the
courage to
act on
my desires
if not
for
your—um—intervention.”
His voice
held quiet
pride.
“You
don’t
have to
be ashamed
or embarrassed,”
Harry added.
“All we
want—both
of us—is
to satisfy
you. To
please you
and make
you happy.
Can’t
you just
accept that?”
11 comments:
That is a good excerpt and I see what you mean!
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just how many ways are there to say HOLY BEGEES this excert is sizzling hot lol love love it :)
Very nice excerpt
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Yay for the excerpt! Enjoyed it. turtle6422(at)gmail(dot)com
Hey, with hot men around, it's hard to decide!
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Hi, Deb!
Thanks!
Thanks, Helene.
The book is even hotter (hint hint...) Thanks for dropping by.
Thank you kindly, BN.
Thanks for taking time to read it, Jana.
Exactly. Would you call her wishy washy?
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